Monday, July 13, 2009

Pronouns Revisited

A few subtle changes that I think help better get at my point:

Pronouns

by Penny Lew


She

was bringing another baby

into this world.


into this family.


As things eventually fell apart,

hindsight told her that they

were trying to glue things together

long before understanding

that anything was broken. They

were rationalizing her choices,

justifying his,

fooling themselves,

pretending,
believing all was well.


She

was bringing another baby

into this world.


into this family.


she.


Not they.


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